Pitch Feedback

We were fed back today by Luke after presenting our pitch. Luke had a very serious and honest mindset when giving feedback from our pitch presentations. He told our group a few things that we needed to work on in order to get his approval for the idea...

1. Female part is more interesting than the male part who simply walks down a street.
2. Slow motion will require a lot more movement than what we have in mind in order to make it look more interesting.
3. The male character seemed to be slightly out of place.
4. We will need to choreograph a whole dance. We will have to spend some extra time making the dance and teaching it to her until she memorizes it.
5. Luke really like the idea of the watery floor, plants, and the red room.
6. The street scene wouldn't really work.
7. Good song choice.
8. We need another element to the music video. It is still too short.If we only use the elements we have now the video would very quickly get boring. 

 After being given all this feedback we had to respond to it. So, here is our response in order to obtain a better video.

1. Make it more about her in bed, dancing and "teasing" the audience and less of the man. 
2. Animate his performance and using water splashes from the female dancer as she steps around the ankle-height flooded room, and then applying slow motion to the splashes.
3. Make male part stronger, yet still keeping it relatively shorter than the female's.
4. We will need to consider and book some extra time in to know exactly what we are going to do for the dance, if it is do-able, and how it will be taught to our female character.